Ideas- You need to create a thesis. Without a thesis you don’t have your statement that you close your introduction or restate in the conclusion. I think this goes under ideas because without a good thesis, it is hard to have a good direction to take the essay.
Evidence- If you make quote make sure you cite them in the text so your reader knows the origin of the quote. I think this belongs under evidence because it is something that they found to support their claim that they are making in the text.
Organization- Try to talk about Southan, the EA and the Ted talk without adding your personal opinion in all of the paragraphs I would tart by stating their claims in their own paragraphs and maybe add one that has your own opinions later after stating the writers point. I think this goes under organization because order is key when writing and constantly putting in your own opinion strays away from their claims.
In high school we did a lot of peer editing so I kind of had an idea of what we were going to do in class, but I was sorta wrong. We did peer editing in a different way than I have ever done it before which was interesting. I liked how we were able to have others read and not just destroy our essays because of spelling but because of content and they actually gave good feedback which I tend to use to its fullest. I hope we continue with what we are doing because I think it is very beneficial to all of us to get other opinions on our writing style and open our minds to a different way of writing.
Alysa,
I am so glad you can see the benefit of our approach to peer writing. I do want to say that I LOVE it when your opinion appears in every paragraph. Remember: This is YOUR paper, and YOUR ideas should drive the paper forward. I want your ideas to infuse the paper. I know this may fly in the face of what you’ve been taught, and because of this, shifting your habits may prove to be a big challenge. Just keep showing up and doing the work, and your habits will change. Keep up the good work! 3/3